I don’t know any way to private message you so will have to put this on the forum. I mean this in a positive way. The poem you edited and changed is interesting. However, the words I wrote were the words I was using to express my thoughts and meaning. As a writer, having someone else edit my thoughts and words without asking me, changes the message and the energy of the message. I tend to change my own words and edit sometimes, but sometimes the words are given to me so I write them. I did not consciously think of the verses I sent, they were given to me if that makes any sense.
Just something to consider.